Lightsong Gets Up Early, Excited

Let this be a lesson to aspiring writers. People’s reactions to these Lightsong sections—where he goes to investigate the murder—are proof of a long-standing rule of writing. Characters who do things are more interesting than those who don’t.

Now, this may seem obvious to you. But let me assure you, when you start to write, you will often be tempted to include viewpoint characters with internal conflicts. Many times, poorly written, these conflicts result in the character being inactive. They can’t decide about things, or they’re a coward, or they’re depressed or indifferent. All of these things are flaws the characters are going to grow out of during the story, and you’re very tempted to build them into the character as a way of giving the character more growth and things to overcome.

That’s not a bad instinct, but it’s much more difficult to pull off than you think. The problem is that a lot of characters like that don’t really do anything for the first part of the story. They’re reactive, and they don’t care about the plot, which makes the reader not care about the plot.

Until you’ve practiced a while, might I suggest that you stick with characters who are passionate about what they’re doing and who try consistently to achieve their goals? Give them different internal conflicts, things that don’t keep them from acting. Learning to write a good book is tough enough without tackling an inactive character in your first few stories.

Lightsong Sees the Painting of the Red Battle

This is our first major clue (though a subtle one at the same time) that there might be something to the religion of the Iridescent Tones. Lightsong does see something in this painting that an ordinary person wouldn’t be able to. A well-crafted piece of art, made by a person channeling the Tones and connected to them via Breath, can speak to a Returned. Now, in this case, it doesn’t work quite like Llarimar says it does—Lightsong doesn’t actually prophesy about the black sword in the way the priest thinks. In other words, Lightsong isn’t prophesying that he’ll see the Black Sword (Nightblood) in the day’s activities.

Instead, Lightsong is seeing an image of a previous war, which is prophetic in that another Manywar is brewing—and in both cases, Nightblood will be important to the outcome of the battle.

To continue, I go into spoilers.

Lightsong Inspects the Murder Scene Again

The interesting thing about this scene is that it reveals almost nothing about what happened. At least, it doesn’t reveal anything to the readers.

However, it reveals a whole lot about Lightsong as a character. I waited until he’d been established before starting to bring up questions like the ones in this chapter, where I begin to dig deeply into who he was before he died. In a way, he’s not investigating the murder so much as he is investigating himself—and that’s why the scene works, even though we know the information about the murders he reveals. (Though we don’t know who that second person was. Unless you read the spoiler above, of course.)

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