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Annotation Mistborn Chapter Thirty Part Two


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Chapter Thirty Part Two

Here’s my original journal entry for this chapter, written right after I finished the chapter itself:

Chapter Thirty: Vin saves Elend at the party.
Finished 5-19-04

It’s wonderful when a chapter turns out just the way you envisioned it.

I worked on this chapter for a long time–from the beginning of the planning process, I imagined this as one of the major action sequences in the book. I began with the image of Vin shooting up through the air as the rose window twisted and fell beneath her in the mists, then I expanded that to her protecting Elend, giving Vin a real scene of heroism. Originally, I wasn’t intending her to fight the Allomancers, just to lead them away, but I decided that I needed a pure Mistborn-on-Mistborn fight in the book. Every other Allomantic battle involves Inquisitors.

The scenes in this chapter are some of my favorite so far. Though, oddly, it took me a long time to get into them–I hedged over what the first part of the chapter should entail. Eventually, I decided that this would be a perfect place to give Vin some abandonment issues. This is a hold-over from the original Vin from the first FINAL EMPIRE write–the fear of abandonment was a large part of that Vin’s personality. It worked well in this setting, and I think I’ll emphasize it just a bit more in the rewrite. The next chapter really plays off of this idea.

It feels a little bit weird to be writing about a young girl running around killing people in her skivvies, but I don’t really see any reasonable way for her to fight in one of those bulky ball gowns I’m using in this book. So, underwear it is!

Kliss and Shan have both come to have much larger parts in the book than I’d intended. Kliss was intended to be a throw-away character used in one chapter, but now she’s become an informant and a conspirator. In a rewrite, I think I’ll have to introduce her sooner and try and give her a more distinctive personality. As for Shan. . .well, I only added her a couple of chapters ago. Obviously, she’ll need more time in the rewrite as well. Vin’s battle will be much better if I can have her fight a named character that’s been an antagonist in a few chapters. The Vin ball scenes have become a larger part of the book than I had thought, and adding Kliss and Shan as recurring characters will help flesh out that plot-line, I think.

Like how I ditch Sazed in this chapter so that I can have Vin’s ‘grand’ entrance in the next chapter? Pretty smooth, eh? I was worried about how I was going to deal with him. . . . As for the actual fight and the scenes, I think everything flowed quite well. We’ll see what readers think!

(Note, when I wrote this, ELANTRIS wasn’t even out yet–it was still over a year away from publication–so I really had no idea if people would be responding well to my writing or not.


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