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Annotation Mistborn Chapter Sixteen Part Two

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Chapter Sixteen Part Two

Sazed’s nature as a Eunuch was stabilized in my mind almost from the beginning of the formation of his character. With the Lord Ruler trying so hard to breed a perfect race of Terrisman servants, I felt that it would be important for him to castrate most of the Terrismen. In addition, I’ve never written a eunuch character before, and really wanted to see if I could deal with one in a good way.

I read up on what castration does to a man when it’s preformed before puberty. Often, apparently, the result is obesity. Another result is that the person grows taller than normal (for some reason) and their arms grow longer in proportion to their bodies than regular people. I didn’t make Sazed fat–I think that had been done too much for eunuchs–but I did give him the other physical characteristic.

He continues to grow more complex as a character as the book progresses. That’s one of the things I absolutely love doing–giving readers a side character that they think will only be secondary, then building his motivation and complexity until he becomes one of the most important figures in the story.

The bit about Mare betraying Kelsier was one of the little tidbits I’d been reserving for quite some time. I hope that some of you managed to guess it. It only makes sense, I think, considering the emotional torment Kelsier has gone through. In order for him to be the man I want him to be, he has to have faced a TRUE betrayal–a hurtful one.

I almost took out the section where Vin thinks “Oh, that’s why Sazed saved me. He has to because he promised Kelsier. That makes sense–after all, why would he want to save me?”

This section fits with the earlier Vin, but I think it’s just a bit out of character for her now. She’s getting over her feelings of worthlessness and solitude. She knows Sazed well enough now to understand that he WOULD save someone because he’s a kind person, not just because he promised that he would.

So, I shortened Vin’s thoughts in that section, de-emphasizing them by adding them into another paragraph, rather than giving them their own. I maybe should have cut them, but I wanted to hint that she’s not over her hang-ups yet. She still has some of those old feelings. The progress is that she doesn’t dwell on them as long.

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