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Annotation Mistborn Chapter Sixteen Part One


The following is an author’s annotation that relates to a specific chapter of the book MISTBORN: THE FINAL EMPIRE. Note that the following is NOT the text of the actual chapter, but a companion to the chapter, revealing “behind the scenes” information. If you have not read the book up to–and including–this chapter, you risk serious spoilers! Please, if you haven’t read MISTBORN, go visit the sample chapters, or perhaps purchase the book via Amazon.

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Chapter Sixteen, Part One

The epigrams in this section of the book should look familiar. Not because you’ve read them before, but because–assuming you have any familiarity with fantasy–you’ve read this kind of story before. The young peasant hero who rises up to fight the dark evil. I suspect that the jacket flap, if you’ve read it, gives away much of this storyline. This is one of the foundational concepts for the book, however. I’ve read too many stories about young peasant boys who save the world. I wanted to tell one about a world where the prophesied here came, then failed!

This concept, of course, evolved. The original idea was for the Dark Lord to defeat the peasant boy. Instead, however, I found the concept of the peasant boy becoming the dark lord more interesting.


The new Kelsier is something that this book needed. If he hadn’t been forced to go through the guilt of nearly-losing Vin (a reminder to him of how one of his jobs lost him Mare) I don’t think he would have had the solemnity and dedication to accomplish the things he does in the rest of the story.

He’ll return more to his old, joking self as the next few chapters pass. However, he’ll always remember what he nearly let happen to Vin, and it will become an important aspect of his character.

By the way, Vin’s line about “We aren’t invincible” is a very important one. In part two, I spent a lot of time showing off just how amazing Mistborn can be. I felt I needed to end the section with a colossal failure–and a near death–to show that while Mistborn are powerful, they aren’t by any means indestructible. Nothing’s more boring than heroes who can’t be defeated.


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