I’m not sure whether this is an appropriate use of the term ostention or not. I guess Dr. Thursby, my folklore professor at college, will have to read the book and let me know. Seemed like it worked for me.
For a lot of my readers, this opening paragraph—with Sazed acting like his old self—was a very triumphant one. They said “Finally, Sazed is back!” in compliment. However, I took that as a sign that something was wrong in the earlier chapters. True, it’s a good archetype to have one of your characters do something wrong for a time before finding redemption. However, the problem with Sazed is that the thing he’d done wrong as a character was boring. You never want that as an author. In the rewrite, I hope that the difference between Sazed in this chapter and previous chapters is still there—just not as stark.
Spook Escapes the Burning Building
This scene with Spook bursting out of the burning building, trailing smoke, is one of two big focal scenes I imagined for his storyline. Interestingly, I had planned on three focal action scenes, and ended up skipping one as I drafted. I planned to have assassins attack the ministry building and Spook fight them off, but could never quite work it into the pacing of the story, and I figured that after this scene—which works so well to convey what I want—another scene was unnecessary.
Kelsier’s voice here has gotten to the point where Spook no longer questions its presence, though he still hesitates to do what it says. For those of you who are paying attention to the connections between the books, it should start to seem more and more like the voice that Zane heard in book two. This one is a little bit more powerful and controlled than the one Zane heard—but then, Ruin is free now and can affect things more directly.
Another reference to previous books comes when Sazed mentions the executions from book one. This is the second or third time we’ve had a reference back to those in this novel, and there were a couple references in the second novel as well. I hesitated to put those executions into the first book because of the graphic nature of the beheadings (which, if you recall, were done into the fountains at the central square, causing the water to flow red). However, it became such an important scene throughout the series that I’m certainly glad I did it. The characters needed a poignant visual memory of the Lord Ruler’s brutality.