Overall, I’m very pleased with the Spook cycle of chapters in this novel—particularly once I revised the early ones to make him a little more sympathetic to the reader. I think there’s real heart, tragedy, and triumph in these chapters. Their one flaw is that the Spook/Beldre romance isn’t very strong, but I can accept that. Considering that both of them are teenagers, with powerful teenage passions, and considering what I managed to do with the space allotted, I’m pleased.
What worked best, I think, was the subtle demonstration of Ruin’s corrupting fingers—mixed with careful plotting to give Spook the power to overcome in the end. He doesn’t win through use of his powers, ironically, but through use of his flaws. The numbness that was so shocking to him earlier now becomes the tool he can use for victory.
The twist with Beldre being an Allomancer isn’t too much of a twist; I suspect that some readers will guess it early on. However, this is the reason the Citizen started saving Allomancers. He recognized their usefulness because of his sister. Like most tyrants through history, it was very easy for him to make, for people he liked, excuses and exceptions to his hatred. It should be noted that Quellion himself had no noble blood. His sister was in fact a half sister.
The final thing I’ll note on this chapter is that the voice Spook hears after he’s pulled out the spike is actually Kelsier. You’ll see Kelsier’s voice pop up a few more times in the narrative, now that Preservation is dead.
Ever the meddler, Kelsier can’t just sit around and let the world end. Preservation’s death left a void, and Kelsier has managed to piggyback his spirit just slightly onto Preservation’s power. He can’t do much, but he can reach out and whisper a few choice words to people. At least until Vin takes the power and shoves him out.
I know I said he wouldn’t come back, but . . . well, he’s Kelsier. He doesn’t listen to what I say. He just does what he wants.