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Annotation Mistborn Chapter Eleven


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Chapter Eleven

This book is quite a bit more violent than ELANTRIS. I worry about that, sometimes. I hope I don’t put people off who enjoyed my first novel. Several things save me, I think.

First off, though people initially don’t think of ELANTRIS as a gruesome book, it really does include quite a few disturbing elements. The brutality of the people in Elantris, for instance, or the slaughtering done by the Dakhor monks. In chapter one of Elantris, we see a boy with his throat crushed, seeping blood. So, really, there isn’t anything in MISTBORN that stands out THAT much.

The difference is, I guess, that one of the heroes is himself a killer. Also, we have scenes like this one, which are just plain disturbing.


Originally, I had Vin far less emotionally affected by the scene of slaughter. I wanted to imply that she’s seen a lot of death and hardship in her life, and so something like this wasn’t all that shocking to her. Alpha readers, however, found her too callous here. I did a rewrite, and realized that I liked it much better with Vin reacting emotionally to the scene of death. She still puts up a strong front, which is very like her. However, she no longer just walks through it without reacting.


We get another mention of the Deepness here. I am a bit sad that I didn’t get to spend very much time in this novel explaining the mythology behind the Lord Ruler’s rise to power. I get to plenty of that in the next two books, fortunately. So, you’ve got a lot to look forward to.


Oh, and no. I don’t know what Camon’s throat-rope is tied to. You did have a foreshadowing of this kind of execution earlier in the book. (Though, to be honest, I added that in during a rewrite. I didn’t come up with particular method of killing someone until I got to this point in the book. It seemed to me that the Inquisitors wouldn’t just kill Camon. They’d do something more drastic.)


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